Now, the experience of making the poem was somewhat of a hassle/annoyance. I wouldn't call it the worst thing in the world, but not the best thing either. First, I had create a much larger poem that had more literary devices sprinkled around, but was considered to be far too big. Then, I had to re-write the poem in a much smaller version in order to keep with the time demand. Even then, I still had to cut good pieces out of the poem because it got heavily with symbolism. It was one of the main problem with my poems, that it is overwritten with symbolism rather then being strait forward. Another problem with my poem was that I envisioned it to rhyme in order to sound good and have a well placed rhythm. Though that was too high of a problem since it would sometimes rhyme without really placing a meaning. Finally, I had too little literary devices in the beginning of the creation of the second poem. I had to find and rewrite some parts in order for myself to get the full credit. There was other problems such as time and placement, but safe to say, there was multiple upon multiple changes while creating this poem. What I want to work on now is finding ways to minimize my poems and be more direct so that it could match the time limit and also be more understandable.
Now, before we go on with the preformed poem, a little background. 95% of the poem that is shown below mainly talks about a girl known as Rosa Maria Hernandez, who immigrated to the US when she was three months old. Apparently, her family needed medical help for their daughter, and there was little to no therapies/medical center for her conditions in Mexico. The family had illegally lived in the US for about ten years until Rosa was taken in an ambulance and sent to a children's hospital at Corpus Christina in Texas. She had surgery for her cerebral palsy in which she had before birth. On her way their, she was stopped by border police. They allowed her and her cousin to get to the hospital, following them all the way to the destination. You The surgery was a success, but immediately after she was taken to Children's Immigration Center in which she is still held their to this day. The reason this was even consider alright with the general police was that this was in the Trump Administration in 2017, in which more than 40% of deportations have grown since his registration.
You see, this was a time when the Dream Act was repealed on September 5, 2017. The Dream Act was in summary a legislative proposal for a multi-phase process for allowing immigrant minors in the United States that would first grant conditional residency and, upon meeting further qualifications, permanent residency. In short, it meant that this country would allow immigrates to live here as long as they had certain qualifications as well as not commit any certain crimes. It was administrated as a bill in 2001, and had worked up all the way up to 2012 in the Obama administration. However, after the Trump Administration fully began, the act was fully repealed, and thus 40% of immigration arrest have rose. To myself, I feel this is extremely hypocritical for a country that was founded by migration and ruin native lives in doing so. I personally find it immoral to take the act considering that they are now taking people who have lived here for years, and create a life. This instance is even worse considering that the person being taken back was three months old in immigration, so she didn't even have a choice. What I want this poem to do is to challenge thoughts on people who side with this law.
If you see the video, then you could see certain types of literate devices used throughout the performance. These being simile, assonance, consonance, onomonipia, alliteration, and different styles of rhyming. Now, what I been doing with these technics is that I used them to enhance the poem to be better heard. Take for example the rhyming.
The reason I choose that was because I wanted to make the poem flow easy enough so that people could remember it. It was also used to give the idea of speed or quickness, as seen through the 8th paragraph.
Another thing I did was that I used the consonace in order to make something seem spamming/freaking out with it repeating certain sounds more and more. Though you don't see this through all the examples, you could see it in the line 39, where the performer keeps repeating the same first letter "w" in a quick and fast way over and over again, almost as if he can't process what's happening, as well as trying to emote with the audience that this is a worrying idea. The alliteration has somewhat of the opposite effect, as it makes the sentence seem slower or easier to understand. We see this through line 22, when some of the tension through the mood had been lowered.
With onominipia, I tried to create a type of suspense with all my actions, as will as bringing in the imagery for said suspense. We see it this in line 21 and 27, in which we are signaled with unpleasantly do to an image of a creaking door, as well as suspense. Even though it isn't natural onimonipia, it still works the same.
As seen throughout the poem, simile/metaphor have been heavily put into it. The reason why I did this was to give better imagery into the poem, just like the onimonipia for sound. Even though some had stated it might be somewhat of a problem, I always enjoyed did because one can interpret the words in different ways, like all art. I believe the best example would be line 9-16, in which we talk about a knight named dream, who was met to be known as the Dream Act.
The Poem of the Land
A family, who came from where resources were limited,
Who conservatives minds thinks their minds were set to primitive,
Came to the US, a country that wished for certain tongues and same faces
The family had no choice, for it was a girl who needed body braces
She had been born broken, and yet the family believe she could be fixed,
She went to the country of immigrants when she only three months old
The family knew if they were found, they would be filed back home
Eventually the girl’s state would be critical, with the family eventually have to pull the plug
They could have been taken, throw, and shipped if it weren’t for a liberal pack
A knight dubbed Dream came to defend and Act
He defended those with licences not strapped to their wetbacks
Even with his armor cracking, he still stand being protective
To those that the conservative mind would call defective
Yet, as the years went by, his armor kept breaking and shaking
Until the backstabbing pen that once helped lead him flaking
He still stood strong, but was unmercifully whipped until he could not handle
On September 5, 2017, he was beheaded and lost his title
And so, ten grinding years, the girl had grow not so grand and graceful
Her condition had turn mental, and would have turned to stone.
She went to a vehicle, with built in machines, ticks, and beeps.
Till they got to a passing point, with two guardsmen debuting with a loud nauseous door creak
Without the knight, her life was likely to dry up till she died,
The guardsmen looked across the room, with each second acting more decisive
They weren’t monsters, and let the girl move despite orders
Yet they followed her, with each step building borders.
She was cured with ten medics and small swords
But when it was over, a loud nauseous door creek came in waiting for some reward
It was the two guardsmen that came, with laws of Trump card emperor pushing down their throats
They took the girl, 150 miles away from home, and deciding to send her to a place she had never known before
Soon people catch her story, fought on what to do and wondering if they should help or scurry
Some couldn’t react, with their ears being blown on why this is true and questioning what we think is clean, right, fit, or dirty
Other, tried to tell the story about the girl that people were in worry, and were hearing in a dashing hurry.
Headlines screamed; Border agents detain 10-year-old after emergency surgery
Like a hawk, the story flew to its penetrating pellicle
Liberal were seeing it as desecrating/despicable
But conservatives argued it’s for the greater good
They sneered if a snake slithers away, venom would turn true
They believe crows will come as buildings are splattered with nauseous red dew
The girl now waits weary and is wedged as the weary scale weighing on such truths
For the creaking to come, for what couldn’t be and what could,
They keep her hidden from the eyes far from the wall
Only show to those, the girl never knew at all
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